Monday, March 1, 2010

Magpie Tales-1KJ

A Weighty Issue

Jewel had found the rough little dohickey among her dad’s things after his death a few years ago and kept it with her as a sort of lucky charm. Now, she jiggled the thingamabob in her pocket as she often did whenever she felt her temperature rising.

She was sure Kelvin knew he would get her blood pressure up if he kept pressing her about this issue again. They’d been together now for over 25 years and there was one thing they’d never been able to agree on. She’d told him often enough that she would not discuss it anymore. They’d each had their say and now she was done with it. Obviously, he wasn’t. He’d begun the subject just as he’d always done by asking her why she’d made that particular decision all those years ago.


As he continued to push her to comment, she twisted the dojigger between her fingers at a faster and faster pace. Its rough edges distracted her as they tore at the skin on her hands and caught at loose strings in her skirt pocket. She was happy for the distraction. She didn’t want to be forced to answer him.


He always did this to her. He would press and push until she became too hot for her fury to be contained. Then she would boil over and her anger would know no bounds. She thought,” he will not be satisfied until he’s worked me into an angry ball of fire,” which she knew she would unleash with a torrent of heated words and incendiary accusations.


She took the whatchamacallit from her pocket and impulsively threw it at him hitting him squarely on the upper arm. “Whydyadothat?” he yelled.


“Because I don’t want to talk about this,” she yelled back at him as she turned and left the room.


Check here for more creative writing prompted by the photo of the whatchamacallit.

28 comments:

  1. Ah, you are so good.;) I recognize myself in this tale. Just like Kelvin, I am the one always pushing unresolved issues.;))
    Have a great *conflict free* day.;)
    xo
    Zuzana

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  2. sounds like she pushed herself there to avoid the issue. nicely told. i think many can relate. nice magpie.

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  3. This is great. You have such a rich story-telling mind.

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  4. Mysterious and amusing at the same time, well written.

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  5. She should have aimed for sqaurely between the eyes! ;^)

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  6. And the unresolved issue was . . .? (Ducking)

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  7. Ouch! I felt the sting! Nicely done.

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  8. Sort of like Hitchcock, but without the murder...hmm!!

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  9. I would have done the same .. LOL .. great story

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  10. Hot item with weight! The object d'art becomes the tour de force! Whatchamacallit's have that power, never underestimate the latent power of weighted force fields. (oh there's another defence). Riotously revelling! Suberb writing skills! Captivating nuances!

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  11. well done. i'm sure the whatchamacallit was better than a frying pan or knife!! its a good thing one of those wasn't the prompt...lol

    smiles,

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  12. It's a bit of cliffhanger as I truly want to know what it was all about. I want to be on HER SIDE but truth be told I am the one that pushes and pushes and pushes! Maybe I need to learn from this!!
    Good story Stevie!

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  13. Some people just need to learn when to let things go! Enjoyed it. Loved all the "dohicky" "whatchamacallit" references - funny.

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  14. Loved the wordsmithing you choose 'dojigger' whatchamacallit 'Whydyadothat' it adds the extra spice or flavor to the story. There is some truth to this story as well--
    good read enjoyed it.
    Joanny

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  15. truth, as the saying goes, is stranger than fiction. Been on both sides of that one, but 2.2 lbs is quite a hefty ting-a-ma-jig to be tossing around. ;)
    rel

    btw, unfortunately my story is dead true.

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  16. Fun reading! But I also want to know about "the issue"!!

    Have visited you several times and enjoy the read!

    Rick

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  17. Finally something is put to good use;) Great writing -exasperation, impatience and anger comes through very well.

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  18. I am intrigued by this thread of story telling. Perhaps you should continue on with it Ms. Stevie Wren. A novel in the making? I think you can, I think you can...

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  19. Thingammys can only distract for so long. I liked the easy style you use. Brought me speedily through the story to.... felt like the beginning of something.

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  20. Did you write this story Steviewren? A good one. Would like to know the outcome of it? - Dave

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  21. Sounds like she might have wanted to kill him. A higher aim, a swifter blow... Ooops.

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  22. I'm surprised she lasted this long before throwing something at him. He's lucky the 'thingumbobby' wasn't a real 1 kilo weight. That would have weighed 2.2 lbs.and might have killed him.
    Very well done.

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  23. Never heard of a dohickey or a dojigger. What brilliant words!

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  24. You have captured how I have felt before...but your character has better aim. Nice piece.

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  25. when you feel it...and your readers "feel" it...you have the mark...
    i have no doubt..you have hit the bullseye!

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  26. Well done Stevie! I see the makings of a novel here!

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