Monday, March 8, 2010

Souvenir - A Magpie Tale

Ill-fated pachyderm
ivory tusks
whittled, carved, gouged and chiseled.
African souvenir,
merely a trinket
pocketed by the hunter.


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26 comments:

  1. This guy is poking his trunk all over the blogosphere. Nicely done. :)

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  2. He is rather quaint and friendly isn't he!

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  3. I love this poem. This is a beautiful carving too.

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  4. I was so taken with the elephant that I forgot to mention your excellent poem, Stevie. I love it!

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  5. So short yet so full of atmosphere.;))
    Well done.;)
    xo
    Zuzana

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  6. that will sit on a mantle and gather dust without a passing thought to the animal who died to give it...sad. nice magpie though.

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  7. "Gouged" punches some pain and sadness into this great little piece. Good one, Stevie!!

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  8. Nicely done, Stevie! I like it.

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  9. Nice -- I think a lot of us see the irony and pathos in an elephant carved from an elephant's tusk.

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  10. Beatiful carving -beautiful poem.

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  11. We were on the same wavelength with this one, steviewren.

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  12. Well done Stevie
    You really nailed the reality of it, and to read "whittled, carved, gouged and chiseled" was a painful reminder of the reality around ivory trinkets. Few words, powerful message.

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  13. Okay, I finally looked up 'pachyderm' so now I know a new word!
    A powerful message conveyed with a minimum of wordage. The definition of good poetry?

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  14. Incidentally, quaint and friendly??? I think he's quite freaky...

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  15. such a powerful message told in just a few words!

    very well done,

    warm smiles,

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  16. Quickly cuts to the chase!
    well said.
    rel

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  17. Powerful and painful for the pachyderm! Great poem!

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  18. Succinct ~ merely a trinket ~ from such a fine fellow. Your poem does him justice.

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  19. So true such a sad fate for such a fine animal from Eden..

    Joanny

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  20. Hmm that's amazing but honestly i have a hard time understanding it... wonder what others have to say..

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  21. Your work is bold your spirit is awesome, and you are courageous and free -- come visit me…

    …rob
    http://image-verse.com = Image & Verse

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  22. Much said here with few words; thought provoking.nicely written

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  23. Sorry for being behind on returning comments to you. Father is in the hospital and we are so absorbed with this part of life. I am grateful to be able to return to see you! And will add my voice to the resounding unique (mostly) comments.

    The factual applications of your piece...blunt.
    The factual applications of your
    piece... succinct.
    POWERFUL and POIGNANT
    Yes, that is how it seems to me. And for 6 lines to be so...is no small task!

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  24. Stevie: Essentially and existentially arriving at the heart of the matter. Absorbing and insightful analysis.

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  25. Loved the last line. For me it opened up a much larger meaning. Has a haiku feel to it. thanks.

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